Greetings from NYC!
Your 84 Blogs are really rocking--I can tell there is some real investment there. It is so nice and it frees us up to do other things. We still need to focus on the books.
Please, carefully read your book crits and begin to delete the images that are not working for you. Hang on to the ones that do. Let's just clean up those blogs abit.
You are still expected to post 7 NEW images on the book blog and 7 NEW images on 84. We are seing some real progress, so keep your nose to the grindstone--it is working!
Again, I am proud of the honesty and integrity of your critiques. Stay professional, honest and thoughtful. We are almost there, and pretty soon we can begin to work on covers, text, font and design.
Start thinking about those things......
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Are we critiquing this week or just focusing on cleaning up our own blogs?
ReplyDeleteI was gonna ask the same thing.
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ReplyDeleteAndrew am I critiquing your week 13-20? or 20-27?
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ReplyDeleteHey gang,
ReplyDeleteI am sorry that I wasn't clear. I did intend for you all to post a crit on the book blogs, but I did not realize that you all were confused until today. I will just grade your blogs this week and I will post our assignment for next week in just a sec.
Please, everyone, at least look at the progress of your peers.
Please visit Sabra's book and crit her though, she is stuck without you!!!!!
Sorry gang!
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Val
* AMANDA
ReplyDeleteThe first images doesn't work for me, although I know that those are "eyes" on a peacock's feathers, they aren't true anatomical eyes, which all your other images in the series have been. If you're going to do eyes, then stick to real eyes, otherwise you might consider shooting the "eye" of a needle, or an "eye-tooth". Just something to think about. The other images are well within the range of the project, and I think the closer shots work better than the wider angle shots. When you get to wide, it becomes less about the eye and more about the animal that it belongs to. I do like the variety of subjects that you are finding to shoot. Keep up the good work.
* ANDREW
Hmmm, I tend to agree with Bryan on this last set of images. The last image just doesn't seem to add anything to the narrative, while all the other images in this group are supportive of your story. I think more action shots would add to the project, giving motion to the imagery and narrative. I also think you should add in some sort of documentation for your progress in reaching your goals. Also state those goals in a clear manner and in a conspicious location on the blog so that we can see where you're at and where you are going. Hard for us to keep you honest if we don't know what your goals are. Good luck!
* APRIL
The macro images are working well for you, my first obvious suggestion would be to work on getting consistant focus. I know you have a much narrower field of focus when doing macro photography, but the sharply focused images stand out against the images that are soft, or even out of focus. There are little tricks to obtaining focus, even with point and shoot cameras. But I like your idea. The thrird image that looks like the nose rest on a pair of glasses is nicely focused with interesting geometric shapes in the frame of the image, on the other hand the image of what appears to be part of a comb with hair is way too soft in my opinion. Keep the images coming!
* ASHLEIGH
Hmmm, the series of images for this week look like a set of individual frames from a video, as they are so closely related. As far as being successful for your topic, I'm not sure it works. Compositionally, some of the images are more successfull than others, and I like the fact that you framed the subject in different portions of the frame as well as from different angles. The mail boxes don't really imply "public place" so much as the house in the background in images 3 and 7. I still think there may be a creative way to add people in the background, or at least something that implies people. Keep at it, you'll figure it out and suprise us all.
* BEN
Ok, all the imagery conveys "texture" in this latest set, except for the 5th image. That image says macro photography of small object, not texture like the other images. I think you have some nice imagery, the lighting, composition and focus are all either right on or very close. Keep at it and lets see what other interesting subject mater you come up with! I really like the eight image. I think the fact that the texture is appealing with no clue as to what it is makes it a strong image in this series.
* BRYAN
Bryan, I have to say that I think your last set from the 14th are stronger image wise than this week's imagery. Just my 2 cents worth. Of this week's set, I feel the first two with the somewhat subtle and soft background color work the best out of this set. But keep playing, you'll learn all kinds of tricks and f/x in photoshop!
BTW, Hawkaye is Don Hill!
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ReplyDelete* CRAIG
ReplyDeleteThe concept and idea are interesting, but out of the images on the page, the one that most strikes me is the 8th one down, with the glass door and the glass cubes window. The visual contrast between clarity and texture is very interesting and compelling. Perhaps if they were shot in HDR and there was more information in the interior dark areas, the images might have more interest. Maybe a contrast between what is inside the frame, ad what surrounds the frame. Just a thought.
* DAVID
From this weeks images, #1 and #7 seem to be the strongest, both in composition within the frame and the setting in which the sandles are placed. Image #6 seems busy, and the other images just don't stand out, perhaps changing the angle or the lighting would help.
* DONALD
Color vs. Texture? Hmmm, looking at the latest color, red, and the textures of the red objects I'm inclined to say that texture is the stronger of the two. I think if these were converted to gray scale, they would still be strong images. I find it easier to remove the color than I do the texture. But that being said, I think the images are strong in color and composition. The strongest image as far as color AND texture is image #5, while the one just above it is strongest in just color. Texture wise I'd say that either #1 or #7 is strongest in just conveying texture. Keep the colors and textures coming, very interesting.
* KENDA
Ok, the weakest image is the 5th image. The focus is on the image to the left of the frame, and the object dead center is out of focus. It feels like the image got cropped wrongly or something. That being said, I think all the other images are strong and can stand on their own merrit, even without needing to be associated with geocaching. Good work, nice compositions, keep up the good work!
* MELISSA
I see your chair is still getting around quite well and exploring new locations! Good for it. Nice of the chair to take you along for the experience. The first image is too blown out, it's distracting. I like the composition, angle, and geometric shapes in the 2nd image. Nothing for the 3rd, the 4th image has the chair wondering how in the heck it's going to reach those elevator buttons. 5th and 6th not much, and the 7th I really like the contrast of the yellow chiar to the darker surrounds, as well as the contrast in texture. Let's see where the chair goes next!
* SABRA
Days 45 and 40 are the strongest out of this set. Some of the others are too contrived, they look like you set them up to take, while the two I mentioned look the most natural. I like the variety of color and textures in your imagery, and really like the ones that look as though you just happened upon them and captured the moment.
* SHELLEY
Hmmm, a topic with lots of potential, but I don't feel you are living up to it yet. Composition wise, I think images 5 and 6 work the best, while I think the others need more subject focus or a different framing. I think a lot can be done with this choice of subject matter, just a matter of finding the opportunities and making the final images work. Good idea, as we're surround by illumination sources 24/7.
* STU
Looks like you may be playing with photoshop a bit. I recall the subject being corners, but it could also be geometric shapes. There is a lot of variety in mundane corners that we take for granted. I think you are managing to capture some of that diversity framed by two walls.
* SUZANNE
Middle row, left image grabs my attention. The other images are ok, but that one has texture, contrast, movement and composition. Good shot. Keep at it and lets see more creative imagery using those hands!
I'm going to post all the comments for my classmates book blogs that do not have a comment option, on here!:
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I really like the way you're taking this body building idea, it's really interesting to see. I like all the different branches of body building you've gone out on. I'm confused as to whether this is your book or you 84? I assume it's your 84 because of the title but what's the blog address for your book?
84
ReplyDelete-Amanda-
I love your images this week simply because they are at the zoo! Composition wise the second to last one is the only one that is displeasing because the eye of the animal is so camoflauge with the rest of the animals. The giraffe, Capuchin, and the Lemur are my favorites! The texture of the giraffe and the lines in it's skin/fur are interesting and the presence of the cages around the capuchin and the lemur are interesting compositionally because of the thirds and conceptually because they look imprisoned.
-April-
You are picking some crazy stuff dude and I am diggin' it! All of your images are strong and fit compositionally. Everything looks alien yet I want to explore more! Keep it up!
-Ashleigh-
I like the lines in the first image and the fact that the storage units arent center, not so much with the second one though because the sign is distracting. The dog looks super fake so I hope it is or else it's gonna blow my mind and it's placement is really good for diving right in on the subject.
-Ben-
Some of the stuff you've photographed looks highly microscopic which is excellent and really throws you off the trail of what you're actually looking at. I don't really dig the first image or the orange and purple one because I guess I just don't like the pattern in one and and don't like the colors in the other. lol But also with the carpeted one, the diagonals and the blurriness isn't very nice. Very good job on the rest of the images though!
-Bryan-
I like where you went this week with your images! Honestly the series reminds me of either some important plants hanging out at some evil scientest lab or some peppers or pods growing something magical in the forest. So these images are great to make me think of some crazy narrative like that! I think what makes it work so well are the splashes of unnatural color that occur rather than the plant being overwhelmed with unnatural colors and contrasts.
-Craig-
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of being inside a building and seeing what is so natural and beatiful outside. I don't particularly like the images with buildings outside the windows but I definitely dig on the ones with trees and nature because it makes me feel like im trapped in something unnatural that is surrounded by nature.
-David-
The shoes are just takin' trips and making adventures lol. Compositionally I think coming out of the dryer and the last one are the strongest for me. I think the rest have too much business around them and the first image's back ground is a little distracting. Conceptually these shoes are just funny to me because I feel like they are humans just doin their thing around town. Like the travelocity gnome. lol
-Don-
These photos remind me of the painting "Nighthawks" because all these resturaunts are styled pretty old school and their big windows are perfect for your peeping tom situation. I like all these images, they work well especially the inclusion of the edges of the windows to let the viewer know you're on the outside looking in.
-Kenda-
This geocaching stuff just throws me off lol. I have a vague idea of what it's about and your images help me to understand more and more each week. I especially like the images with the silver thingamabob because of it's placement and it's ruggedness.
-Melissa-
I love that this chair is just doin' it's thing and is like an actual person. Going to the ATM, maxin' and relaxin' in a condo, it's so hilarious to think about it that way. All these images are excellent and I can't wait to see where this chair goes next.
-Sabra-
I'm really liking the attention to one thing. The focus on one thing and it's background is much easier to follow and understand than many things or even one thing with a gaping background. I like.
-Shelley-
I like where you're going with the illumination of all the objects you use. There's alot of light in the everyday objects that people come in contact with and it's interesting you chose to highlight that especially being foreign. The image working the best for me in the battery charging image because its whimsical.
-Stu-
Those corners are still looking nasty, nice job on that. lol jk I like the different colors you decided to implement in this series. I feel like these corners aren't to scale with how big you are and would be difficult for you to curl up in. In the layout of the blog, the images seem to do a wonky tetris dance and if that's what you like keep it, but if not, it's kind of spacey and makes me lose some interest trying to follow.